Today I went outside and I noticed that the leaves are already starting to fall. I look forward to seeing that all year. Don't get me wrong I love summer but it's just not the same. When I think of fall I think of trips with my WHOLE family to Apple Hill and to the Pumpkin Patch. Grandparents, aunts, uncles, and cousins would all make the drive and meet up. I wish that I could go back to those times. The laughter, caramel apples, and the smell of hay. It didn't smell so great at the time but I would smell that for the rest of my life if I could go back one last time. Since then my family has vastly grown apart and my grandma has passed away. I remember riding the hay ride with her and us laughing at all the pointless things. We would laugh at how little kids are fighting or how every time we would go over a bump everyone on the truck would go up or even how the exhaust
from the truck smells so bad. Isn't it funny how its always the little things that make the moment memorable? My family continues to go back every year but never with the whole gang. It never compares to the times that we all went together and I'm positive it never will. When I see the leaves start to fall I think of how much I miss those times, but at least I have the memories:)
I love when you said, isn't funny when it is the little moments that make a moment memorable. That really caught my eye. This story put a smile on my face, and probally anyone else who reads it. I love how what u wrote can make me relate to stories like that. Whixh is awesomee. I loved it, and keep it up!
ReplyDeleteyou use a lot of sensory details in this piece which make the words bring your memory to life. I noticed you use a lot of scent memories. Explore that in your future pieces. How does describing the smell of something put us in the scene?
ReplyDeleteThis is a really strong piece. This line is great: "The laughter, caramel apples, and the smell of hay." You used just a few phrases to capture a moment, and that's definitely a great skill, to be able to set the scene with a few sensory details.
ReplyDeleteThe whole piece is really kind of a burst of the flavor of fall, and it's really pretty hopeful towards the future. Overall I love it.
i really liked the sensory details you used. i could actually picture the things you talked about and that can be hard to do. good job
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