Dear guy 3 machines down,
You make my workout so much more enjoyable. I have ran 3 miles with sweat dripping down my face, my breath is shorter with every thud my foot makes against the machine. I was dreading the last half a mile when I hear your laugh booming off the walls. We are watching the same show and yes I did just let out a chuckle because Allan said something funny to Jake but really? It has to be your first time watching Two and a Half Men or something because that wasn’t even one of the funnier jokes. Oh! There it is again; apparently you thought that was funnier because you were WAY louder. Now I could care less about the characters on the TV show, they aren’t the ones making me laugh anymore but I am tripping over my own feet on the treadmill because of you. Do you not know how loud you are? Or that people are staring? Or do you not care? Well either way you made my workout and most definitely my day. So thank you cute guy with a loud laugh, I hope to see you here soon. ;)
<3 The girl 3 machines down
This is actually a quite funny piece. I like the the connection on how you were laughing just because the guy was laughing. I sure everybody laughs at dumb jokes not because they were funny but because a person's laugh is infectious. What you could have worked on is the setting, i know you are in a gym but it doesn't hurt to add detail on the place.
ReplyDeleteit had a nice flow to it. Something to make this piece better would be to improve the word choice.
ReplyDeleteI really like that story cause i can relate to seeing weird people yelling in the gym. I really was able to picture you falling on the machine. you should go flirt with the guy. thank you for sharing :)
ReplyDeleteIt was a pretty funny piece.
ReplyDeleteYou could work on adding more detail, like how was he laughing was it a hehe or haha , or , ahhhaha. Those are the things that could make this piece enjoyble.
I liked it. but maybe put in how his laugh sounded compared to the loud treadmill. describe his laugh and it will make more since. i love you <3 Thanks for writing about me, i know i work out really well(:
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